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Old April 5th, 2009 #34
Bev
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This isn't a typo but constructive criticism

How the Jewish Supremacists Wrecked America.
The line "They have torn our borders open, permitting, indeed cheering, the Third World dregs who will soon replace us as the majority" doesn't read smoothly to me. Permitting and cheering what? I know what you're referring to, but it doesn't seem fluid enough.


Perhaps changing it to "They have torn our borders open, permitting, indeed cheering, *the mass entry of the Third World dregs who will soon replace us as the majority"

or *<word meaning uncountable> influx. I thought of immense or immeasurable influx but I hate alliteration. Something that alludes to the fact it's not known exactly how many illegals and legals have wandered in. D'ja get what I mean?

and White America’s Final Warning
by N.B. Forrest still has competant instead of competent in the first line, top of page 1.

I see you got the capital A in the rec. reading, but you uncapped Rules. It should be Who Rules America.
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